Show, Don’t Tell!

The boy was sad – The boys face gets red and blemished, his eyes bloodshot, and his eyelids puffy. He got a lump in his throat; his voice cracked when he tried to speak. He scrubbed and blew his nose to stop the snot running down his face. His breathing stuttered when he tried to take a deep breath.

The dog wanted to go for a walk – The barking and whimpering could be heard throughout the house as the eager puppy circled his owners. Seeing the tail which waged with a dire need to escape the confinements of the building. they arose from their beds.

The temperature fell and the ice reflected the sun – Crisp ice emerged seemingly from no where onto the lamp post feeding back the light of the dying sun. I focused in on my vision i noticed the chilled breath emerging from my mouth.

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